Haiku you just for you
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i love you
i need you
i want you
come back now
turn around
return
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Thank you for coming by and commenting first on my first Haku. Glad you like it Namaste.
I don't know how to make one of those just like I am not good at writing poetry, but I know a good one when I see it. I love this. In my humble opinion, I think it's great.
Thanks Alexander, I always appreciate your kind comments.
What's this? You have decided to write agin? I am so glad, Angel Face!
And this is so sweet... :-)
Thanks DG. Sometimes the urge to write is so strong I have to do it or burst!! Thanks for stopping by.
Now I'll have to go Google Haku....
I just though it was a short Hub...
Pleased to see you back with us, its been a long dry spell !
True Merlin, true. Thanks for the kind comment. I enjoy Haku
Haiku- always fun to write! Di you mind if I use this as an example in the classroom. The children absolutely love doing this, but sometimes like everything else, the better the examples........ the more understanding they are of the concept. Thanks for this ! Kaie
Hello Kaie. I would be honored for you to use this as an example for your children. I would love to see some of the results. Perhaps you could write a hub about it? Thanks for stopping by.
Right to the point, I love Haiku's
It is a new venture for me but I love the concept too. Thanks for coming by and your kind comment
Very nice and gets right to the soul of the message.
Thank you Billy. I appreciate your kind comment
Simple words but very expressive. Thank you.
Glad you enjoyed it Hello hello.
beautifully simple - just the right way to reach someone :)
(an opinion of one, not skilled in writing poetry, but loving to read it). Thank you for sharing, Gypsy Willow.
Aurifin
Your opinion is very valuable Aurfin. I truly appreciate your comment. Thanks for stopping by.
I hope whomever this to the point message was sent to he/she turned around and returned to you:0) Nicely done.
He did! Thanks for coming by and reading my haiku spell!
Very nice first effort...Simple, direct, and expressive...This is a different " haiku " than most other forms that require a certain rigidity of syllabic expression...Although it lacks the disciple of construction it conveys an immediacy to the poems' intent...I enjoyed reading this aloud, with your implied emphasis...Thanks for sharing this with us, I am looking forward to more of the same...Larry
Thanks Larry. It was written from the heart.
i like it
Thanks for coming by and commenting Girish. Glad you like it!
Hello Gypsy. Well, this is so different I did not know what to make of it. It is raw and powerful, as in less is more. Thank you for sharing.
Hi FGual, that was the intent. it is new to me too but I loved writing it. Thanks for stopping by.
Nice picture
Thanks
Glad you came by jacobkuttya. Thank you.
It was beautiful - you got straight to the point.
Glad you liked it KK Gals. Thanks for the kind comment.
enjoyed visiting your site - great work - awesome
Thanks net2010 for the kind comment.
Very nice. You know how the saying goes, If you love someone then set them free, and if they come back to you then it is meant to be. :)
How true Money Glitch, well he did! Thanks for dropping by and the kind comment.
Huge depth of feeling in so few words. Beautiful. x
Thanks for reading and commenting Dim. xx
Beautiful! Aloha from Hawaii!
Thanks Johnny, I appreciate your comment and your visit from beautiful Hawaii.
Short and definitely sweet. Thanks for a great Haiku.
Thanks for reading. I appreciate your comment. Poetry doesn't have to be long, does it?
..well this is just for you - please accept my humble thanks for visiting me and making my day a happy one.
Your words here are so soft and sweet and true - that it could only come from someone as nice as you!
Glad I could make your day happy. Thanks for your kind comments.
This is new to me Gypsy Willow, but the picture is awesome and make me want to learn more about Haiku. Thank you for sharing this :)
Thanks for stopping by febriethan. I appreciate your kind comment. The picture was taken in Wales on Dinas Island in Pembrokeshire.
I enjoyed your lovely Haiku poem. It is straight to the heart of the matter. No pussy footing around. Well done!
I am not a pussy footer James! Thanks for coming by!
Hi Gypsy, love this poem, glad your back! You have a true talent!
Thanks Ladybird, I enjoy keeping up with my Hubpages friends. Thanks for coming by.
I love to get exposure to different forms of writing and poetry. This is the first Haiku I ever liked from the onset. Beautiful...
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. Love poetry don't you?
Thank you for a nice, short and sweet poem. Thank you also for being one of my followers, I appreciate you. Godspeed. creativeone59
Thank you creativeone 59. Following you is my pleasure.
Simply but yet perfect. What more is there to say when one is in love. Return, stay, never leave me. Hugs
Thanks saddlerider.
What I find so beautiful about this poem is the raw honesty. My pride would never allow me to tell a man I am in love with that I need him, want him, or tell him to turn around, come back, or return. Although some have commented on the simplicity of the few words so directly put, I find the reality of what was said, to be extremely complicated. These words could only be uttered by a woman that is self assured, confident, and willing to risk all (emotionally) for love. You are an incredible woman. It saddens me that a woman of my age is either not brave enough or has never loved enough to utter such basic and simple words to a man.
Hi Lisa, thanks for your candid comment. My man is a ferry pilot and I am never sure he will return safely as his job is not without danger. I think this is where the raw emotion comes into play. PS there's always time!
Without knowing this, the poem could be interpreted so many different ways. As poetry often is. Knowing this about you and him gives me a whole new perspective and it is even more beautiful. None of us know if our loved one will return. I lost my husband 3 years ago, suddenly. I know the fear you feel. You at least get to say these words to your husband. I never got the chance and now I never will. Thank you for the explanation and my wish is that he has a safe return home to you every time.
Dear Lisa, I am sad to hear o your loss. Life is very precarious at best. Thanks for your good wishes for his safe return. xx
Poignant, simple but complicated too - did you show this to your man?
Hi Juliette, of course, I wrote it for him. He was on a difficult ferry bringing a small plane back from the middle east which was hazardous to say the least! Thankfully he returned safely shortly after he read this. It is hard to say the least, waiting in this situation. Thanks for stopping by
Amazing! The emotions you've managed to provoke in me with only a (beautiful) picture and a few words. Voted up and up.
Thanks for the kind comment Martie. I think we share a love of poetry!
I loved it and it is beautiful. Please visit my hub. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for your kind comment Neverletitgo. I shall certainly pay you a visit right now.
Hi, this was full of meaning, I only recently realised what a haiku was! really liked it, thanks nell
Glad you liked it Nell. It was new to me too!
lovely green green grass of home
nice photo.
It is taken on the Pembrokeshire coastal path around Dinas Island in Wales where I come from. The most beautiful country on the planet
It is really very beautiful Haiku and I liked it. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you Neverletitgo. I appreciate your kind comment.
Gypsy Willow, Beautiful, simple yet Powerful! Thank you for sharing, Peace & Blessings!
Thank you DeBorrah. I appreciate your comment and kind good wishes.
I would probably return after reading that! LOL! Thanks for sharing it! WB
Well he did!
Even with such brevity, the formatting and accompanying picture do well to make this understated poem stand out. Thanks. :)
Thanks for the visit Ixxy. I appreciate your kind comment.
HI, I love this! I think it is because I am getting the idea of Haiku now, before I just thought they were short but profound poems, but now I realise that the most important thing about them is that each word is meaningful, there are no 'waste' words, and that is what makes it so special great example, cheers nell
Thank you nell for reading and commenting. I appreciate your opinion.
Short, very sweet and very direct...your work says the most in such a short period of time. Very powerful and thought-provoking.
Thank you for reading my haiku Mr. Hayes. I appreciate your positive comment.
Short and Sweet.
Thanks. :)
Cheers Lady_E!
short sweet and powerful, lady e took teh words out of my mouth!
Thanks Rebecca, say it as it is I say!
i feel that i must turn around and come back now. how strange
lovely :]
Glad you were affected by my writing. Words are very powerful. Thank you for the visit!
nice poem, though im sorry to say that this isnt a haiku. a haiku is a japanese poem consisting of 3 lines, the first one 5 syllables, second 7, and then finally the third ending with five syllables. all in all this poem should have 17 syllables but it only has 16.
Thanks for correcting me. I have corrected it!
wow such a great improvement. without taking away any of the great in-depth meaning of this peom you have merely made it an even greater haiku!
Thanks am
Beautiful, I like it.
Thanks Fluffy
Perfectly said, and all that is needed to be said. Well done!
Enough said!!
Beautiful.
Thanks blueyez!
Still amazes me how much can be said in so few words. Lovely my friend.
Johnny Love
How Short, How Sweet, How Beautiful! I look forward to following your Hubs.
Thank you b. I appreciate your visit.
Thank you JadedLove. I like your poetry too. Thanks for the visit.
Enjoyed your Haiku, though the form is different, there have been developed several other forms of Haiku as well and this tends to fall in the free haiku category. Voted up.
Yes, I enjoyed the poem but was distracted by the free form. It was enjoyable though.
It was meant to be a Haiku with form like a path in the picture :(
Brilliant now I get it!!
Thank you!!
JT
So very straight to the point and I am not alone in liking this one obviously. I look forward to catching up with many more from you Gypsy Willow.
Take care
Eiddwen.
Thanks Eiddwen. I have just returned from Wales where the photo was taken. Thanks for popping in!
Thanks for dropping by multiman, I really should learn more about this poetry form. I just wrote from the heart
Sometimes a few words is all you need. Beautiful.
So true Jennuhlee, thanks for the visit.
So much said in so few words, absolutely beautiful.
Thank you for visiting my humble poem Movie Master.
Hi, short but very sweet! lol lovely!
Hi Nell, didn't need many words to get the message across. Thanks for the visit
Simple, direct to the point and meaningful. Thanks for sharing. I used to write Haiku poems during my high school years. It brings back my desire to compose Haiku poems again.
Thanks for sharing. :D
Hi travel_man! thanks for the visit. I look forward to reading your poems.
Very unique and interesting poem! But I've to G-search now to find out what is a Haiku poem. Ciao!
Now I know what a Haiku poem is... very interesting concept. :)
Hi andycool, glad you like my Haiku. Now you can write some yourself! Thanks for the visit.
Your words are so simple, yet they are very striking. I wish my poetry was even an ounce as good as yours is.
Thank you so much for visiting and the compliment. I really appreciate it.
Short and Sweet..... :)
True :)
Powerful, truthful, and from the heart. Nothing more is needed. Beautifully done. I love it!
vocalcoach~
Thanks vocalcoach for the kind comment. It was written from the heart.
This was very interesting. Great meaning in few chosen words. Up, awwesome, and beautiful:)
Glad you stopped by thelyricwriter, thanks for the kind comment.
I actually loved it :) great job :)
Thanks Frank!
Hi gypsy, love this haiku, brilliant!
Thanks MM, glad you came by!
Simple and sweet--just the way haiku should be. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for reading anginwu!
I'm at a loss for words here :) lol. I congratulate you on creating creating one of the shortest epic poems on hubpages I've ever read before. Nice!
Thank you CloudExplorer. I am honoured you call it an Epic Poem
I love first Haiku.. really nice...can you teach me?
I voted up and beautiful
Happy New year
Debbie
Thanks for the kind comment. You must follow your heart with your writing. The rules are simple.
I too loved it.. ") why wouldn't he come back lol thanks for sharing :)
Hey Frank thanks for reading. I appreciate your kind comment. He did come back!
Short and sweet. Poetry the way I like it. Nice Welsh image too. Great hub! Loved it.
Thanks Mark. Short and sweet is good!
Gypsy that's right......... every had some one spacial like as you explain:)
Yes secendra, it was written for a special some one.
yes my dear i know that but Gypsy my name is "seoendra":(
OOPs sorry seoendra!
How have I missed you as well? Such an economy of words - but Wow - the message! I appreciate the challenge to say so much with just a few words. Glad to know you.
Thank you Kathleen. I'll check your hubs too. Haiku are a fun challenge
73 Comments, so far, and you answered each one. As impressive as the poem was, I found that impressive, too! 22 feedbacks: awesome (2nd most) and beautiful (the blue ribbon winner.) It's surely nice when Hubbers take the time to click the feedback boxes, don't we know!
Well that is a super comment Perspycacious! Thank you very much. I really appreciate it when Hubbers take the time to read and comment on my humble writing! ( I put that in as it sounds a Japanese type of thing to say after a Haiku)
Nice Haiku! I love the picture too and find that in a way it goes well with your poem....I could see myself in the little trail and turning back!
Thank you for your visit. You would be pleased to walk on that little trail. It is the trail in the Pembrokeshire Coastal Path
Deborah Demander Level 3 Commenter 22 months ago
I like this.
Namaste.